[UPDATE: So honored to share that this story placed this year!]
I feel like all the seasons have been a frenzy this year but, at least writing frenzies are the GOOD kind of frenzy. If you’re a member of the kidlit writing community, you’ve heard of Kaitlyn Sanchez – mom, teacher, children’s author, agent, (maybe super-human?), and host of so many wonderful contests. This year, Kaitlyn and children’s author, Lydia Lukidis, are hosting the Fall Writing Frenzy and offering some amazing prizes. A story in 200 words or less, based on a provided picture. You can check out the rules here.
Now, usually I stick to picture books and, recently, middle grade, but I couldn’t resist a little YA romance this year. I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it!
ALIVE (199 words) by Nicole Loos Miller
He gasped, taking his first breath in over a year.
Halloween. She must be close.
He flexed his fingers, smiling. Soon he’d be able to move his whole body, if only for one night.
Ten years ago, she’d been playing with her homemade wand in the cornfield. The green spark surprised them both – landing on the scarecrow’s chest, igniting a beat within his heart.
Now, she was eighteen. The farm had been sold. It would be their last night together before he was torn down, his fields paved.
Dried cornhusks crunched underfoot as she approached. He climbed down, limbs awkward with disuse.
His heart ached as her green eyes pierced through him. She was different this year – taller, face thinner. But that same mischievous smile sent a tingle across his burlap skin.
She reached out and nestled her fingers between his.
“I missed you,” she whispered.
His reply caught in his throat.
She laughed – a bright, silver sound.
His heart beat like a caged bird.
“I made a wish,” she said, leaning close. She smelled of cloves and fallen leaves.
Her lips on his.
A spark.
But this time, it spread.
He was alive.
For good.
Nicole!! I need more! So very good! Clap clap clap
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Thanks, Dedra! I think you guys have convinced me to expand it 🙂 I’m plotting….
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👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼
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🙂 Thank you, Dedra!!
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♥️♥️♥️👏🏼👏🏼
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I agree!! Great job, we need more…
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The best compliment a writer can get! Thank you so much 🙂
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Love it
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I’m so glad! Thank you, Dana!
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Awesome! I love the changes you made. So magical and romantic.
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Thank you so much Sarah! And, always, for your feedback 🙂
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Sweet!
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Thank you!
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Nicole , Great twist on the kiss and frog/prince story. Love-sent a tingle across his burlap skin. I want to read more of your fairy tale❤️
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Thank you so much, Janie!
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Nicole , Great twist on the kiss and frog/prince story. Love-sent a tingle across his burlap skin. I want to read more of your fairy tale❤️
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Yay! Thank you, Janie!
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I love it! It’s filled with atmosphere, longing and love. You could definitely expand it and give us more.
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I’m so glad to hear you love it! Thank you so much!
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Love the changes!!! So good
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Thank you! And thank you for all your feedback! 🙂
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Nicole! This is just perfect. Your changes made this story come alive (pun intended, lol). Well done, my friend! Wishing for more….MG novel?
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Aw, thank you so much, Glenda! Some YA notes might be in the works…
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What a unique concept! I love it!
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Thank you so much, Jakki!
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Excellent! What a wonderful start to A YA novel. Go for it!
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Oh, so lovely! I’m so glad to read a happy ending. ❤
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Thank you so much, Jolene!
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Please, please, please finish this story! I need to read more!!! So good!!! You’re amazing!
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Aw, thank you Daniele!
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Thanks for sharing this happy and unique love story with us for the fall writing frenzy!
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Thanks for reading (and, you know, organizing and running the whole thing!)
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😍😍 thank you for sharing and for being such a wonderful part of the community
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